The line graph shows the average number of weekly patieents vivsiting four clinics of a hospital form 2010 to 2016.
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ilustrates
the average Correct your spelling
illustrates
number
of patients visiting four Use synonyms
hospital's
clinics for a week from 2010 to 2016. It is noticeable that Change noun form
hospital
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number
of patients significantly Change the article
a number
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increased
in
the end of Change the preposition
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duration
.
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the duration
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people
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addressed
dressed
the
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apply
for
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apply
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level
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levels
people
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whereas
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people
. Birth control fluctuated every year and reached a peak Use synonyms
number
of Use synonyms
people
about under 200 Use synonyms
people
in 2014. Use synonyms
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lowest Change the article
the
number
at 150 Use synonyms
people
in 2012 and Use synonyms
then
gradually increased until Linking Words
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at
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apply
duration
.
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the duration
same
level at Change the article
the same
beginning
as dental which stood at between 50 and 100 Correct article usage
the beginning
people
. Use synonyms
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fluctuated every year. It reached the highest Fix the agreement mistake
Diabetics
number
at between 100 and 150 Use synonyms
at
2016. Change preposition
in
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number
at 50 in 2012. Use synonyms
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tended
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increase
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apply
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