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The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given bar chart compares the proportion of households that bought and rented accommodation in England and
wales
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Wales
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 in a
cetern
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certain
 period of time from 1918 to 2011.
Over all
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Overall
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, The percentage of
famlies
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families
 in rented living places were much higher rather than
famlied
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families
 in owned between 1918 and 1961,
while
 the numeric data shows
otherwise
 between
last
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the last
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 four
stage
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stages
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 of time from 1981 to 2011. It is evident that the proportion gap between
two
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the two
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 ways of living in a
house
 were very
wind
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windy
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 in three period of time, especially in 1918 the data of households rented
house
that
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apply
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was over 50% higher than
house
 buying. Until in1961, the difference
of
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in
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 data
shows
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was
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 smaller and only was 20%.
This
 year is
significant
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a significant
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 point in 1971 that there were
same
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the same
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 amount of families who rented and bought accommodation. From 1981 to 2011, the situation was contrary that people who bought living places as their
home
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homes
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were
Unnecessary verb
apply
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more than
that
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those
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 person rented
house
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houses
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.
And the
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The
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 trend of changes
about
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in
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that
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those
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 two ways
is
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apply
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fluctuated.
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