Some people like to work in teams. Others prefer to work alone. Which do you prefer? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

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The experience I gained from the CrossCulture Programme will certainly be implemented into the programs in my current company. Experiences
such
as meeting people from different parts of the world with different thoughts will certainly open up horizons in looking at the world today.
Then
, I will apply my skills in the GIS field in an advanced way so that people can feel helped by my presence in the GIS field. The
last
thing of course is to share the happiness related to what I got in Germany, the experience, and the skills I learned. These three things are very related to each other and of
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it is a real contribution to the company. I really wish I could be part of the CrossCulture Programme.
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task response
The essay provided does not address the prompt effectively. It fails to make a clear choice between working in teams or working alone, and it does not provide specific reasons or examples to support a position on the given topic. To improve, you must directly answer the question and structure your essay with an introduction that includes your thesis, body paragraphs that explain your reasons, and a conclusion that summarizes your main points.
coherence cohesion
Coherence and cohesion are lacking in the essay because there is an absence of a clear logical sequence of ideas and paragraphs. The content does not flow, making it difficult for the reader to follow the argument. To enhance coherence, ensure that each paragraph contains a central idea and is connected to the overall argument of the essay. Cohesion can be improved by using transition words and phrases to link ideas between sentences and across paragraphs.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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