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WRITING TASK 1 You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The diagrams below show the design for a wave-energy machine and its location. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

WRITING TASK 1 You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The diagrams below show the design for a wave-energy machine and its location. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.
#minutes #diagrams #show #design #wave-energy #machine #location #summarise #information #features #comparisons
The diagrams showed two wave-energy
machine
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machines
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 that
are
Wrong verb form
were
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builded
Correct your spelling
built
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which
Correct pronoun usage
apply
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with no
informations
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information
pieces of information
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for
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about
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 what purpose they were built, with
same
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the same
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 construction placed in
a different locations
Correct the article-noun agreement
different locations
a different location
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. One near the land, and one
further
 to the ocean. Based on the diagrams,
placement
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the placement
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 of the wave-energy
machine
 affected the
instalation
Correct your spelling
installation
 costs, the
amount
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number
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 of waves, and
also
 the output. The wave-energy
machine
 that
placed
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is placed
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 near the land will
product
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produce
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 small waves and large output, whilst
has
Wrong verb form
having
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advantage
Add an article
an advantage
the advantage
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 in terms of low installation costs.
Meanhwile
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Meanwhile
,
for
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apply
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the one placed furthest, exceeded
large
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a large
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 amount of waves and
higher
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had higher
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 output compared to the
machine
 located
in
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on
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 the coastline.
And it
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It
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also
 costs
higher
Correct word choice
more
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 to install since it will have to stand from
deeper
Correct article usage
a deeper
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 surface in the ocean.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words machine with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "diagrams" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "waves" was used 3 times.
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