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You have recently been appreciated by a client. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter Describe the appreciation you have received. Describe the work you have done. Ask him for a raise.

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Dear Mert, I am writing to inform you that
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 Supply Chain Summit was great. There were 20 successful
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. Mr Metin who is working as CEO came
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up to me and
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 me. He said that;'It is a
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 achievement to increase your plant efficiency and decrease occupational incidents. As a woman
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 wanted to thank you.' It was a big honour for me.
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 , I informed all participants about our factory
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 we discussed
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our company goals.
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 made a presentation about which improvements we have
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.My presentation was really fascinating. All leaders were influenced. I
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 working in
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 company for 3 years. I have done many creative jobs. Result of
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 you promotion which
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. I look forward to your reply. Yours sincerely, Merve Kerküklü

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coherence cohesion
Ensure that the letter has a clear introduction, body, and conclusion, and that ideas flow logically from one to the next.
coherence cohesion
Open with a formal salutation appropriate for a letter to a manager, and a formal closing is also necessary.
coherence cohesion
Each paragraph should focus on a single idea or aspect of the topic to maintain clarity.
task achievement
All parts of the prompt need to be clearly addressed with enough detail, including the description of work, the appreciation received, and a polite, formal request for a raise.
task achievement
Maintain a polite and formal tone throughout, as it's suitable for professional communication, and avoid informal language or phrases.

Structure your letter

A letter needs to be written using a proper format, including the following:

  • A greeting (Dear sir/madam, Dear John, Dear Mr. Smith)
  • The main body (consisting of paragraphs for each part of the letter)
  • A closing (Yours sincerely, Yours faithfully, Best wishes, Kind regards, Love)

When writing a letter as part of the IELTS General Training Writing Task 1, it is important to include the bullet points presented to you in the question.

All three bullet points need to be presented. And remember that some bullet points contain more than one element. So, make sure to watch for ‘and’ and plurals.

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