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The pictures show information about average income and spending on food and clothes by an average family in a city in the UK

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The given diagrams show the average income and spending on groceries and
clothes
 in 2010 and 2013 by
middle class
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 families and to which products the money
is
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was
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 allocated in 2010. Clearly, the average earnings decreased
while
 the total expense on daily needs increased, and the pie chart displays that meat and fish were the most purchased groceries in 2010. In 2010, the average wage stood at 29000 and it dropped to 25000 in 2013. The average spending on food on
clothes
,
on the other hand
, rose from 14000 to 15000. The pie chart illustrates the details of food and
clothes
 bought in 2010. Meat and fish was 29% in 2010,
and
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followed by fruit and vegetables with roughly one quarter.
Next,
other food was 18%, and the figure
of
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for
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clothes
 was 15%.
Lastly
,
the
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dairy products only had a small minority.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • average income
  • spending habits
  • proportion
  • cost of living
  • economic changes
  • cultural factors
  • standard of living
  • economic health
  • leftover income
  • savings
  • expenses
  • financial trends
  • value for money
  • economic forecasts
  • significant increase/decrease
  • spending patterns
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