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The charts below give information on average life expectancy in four countries, from 1993 to 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below give information on average life expectancy in four countries, from 1993 to 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pictures depict the average expectancy of
life
 in
Japan
, Korea,
U.S.
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the U.S.
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, and
Indonesia
 and
growth
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the growth
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 of
life
 expectancy in those
countries
 from 1993 until 2008.
Overall
,
Japan
 has a significant level of
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a life
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life time
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lifetime
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in
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apply
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over decades. Unpredictable,
Indonesia
 on the highest of increased
life
 span over a period of 15
years
 among the
countries
. The
people
 in
Japan
 and Korea
has
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have
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 more
lenght
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length
 of
life
 time than the
others
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other
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countries
.
Average
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The average
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 of
life-expectancy
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expectancy
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people
 in
Japan
 and Korea at 82,7
years
 &
79,2
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and 79,2
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years
 respectively.
However
, these
countries
 saw a
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minimal rose
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rose
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 minimall on
life
expentancy
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expectancy
 with 5.1
years
 and 9.3
years
 over decades respectively.
On the other hand
, an individual in
U.S.
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the U.S.
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saw
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is
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a
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apply
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more
6.3
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than 6.3
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years
 old than Indonesian
people
. The hope of
life
people
 in
U.S.
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the U.S.
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 was 77,2
years
 old
and
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apply
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followed by
Indonesia
with
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at
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 70.9
years
 old in 2008. Surprisingly, the
life
 expectancy in
Indonesia
 saw a significant increase to 14.1
years
.
In contrast
 to U.S. only grew 3.2
years
 in that period.
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words life, japan, indonesia, countries, years, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • life expectancy
  • trends
  • increase/decrease
  • significant
  • improvements
  • economic factors
  • lifestyle changes
  • healthcare
  • average
  • convergence
  • divergence
  • overall trend
  • future patterns
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