The charts below give information on average life expectancy in four countries, from 1993 to 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The pictures depict the average expectancy of
life
in Japan
, Korea, U.S.
, and Correct article usage
the U.S.
Indonesia
and growth
of Correct article usage
the growth
life
expectancy in those countries
from 1993 until 2008. Overall
, Japan
has a significant level of Add an article
a life
life time
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lifetime
in
over decades. Unpredictable, Change preposition
apply
Indonesia
on the highest of increased life
span over a period of 15 years
among the countries
.
The people
in Japan
and Korea has
more Correct subject-verb agreement
have
lenght
of Correct your spelling
length
life
time than the others
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other
countries
. Average
of Correct article usage
The average
life-expectancy
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expectancy
people
in Japan
and Korea at 82,7 years
& 79,2
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and 79,2
years
respectively. However
, these countries
saw a Correct word choice
minimal rose
rose
minimall on Replace the word
rise
life
expentancy
with 5.1 Correct your spelling
expectancy
years
and 9.3 years
over decades respectively.
On the other hand
, an individual in U.S.
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the U.S.
saw
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is
a
more Correct the article-noun agreement
apply
6.3
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than 6.3
years
old than Indonesian people
. The hope of life
people
in U.S.
was 77,2 Correct article usage
the U.S.
years
old and
followed by Correct word choice
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Indonesia
with
70.9 Change preposition
at
years
old in 2008. Surprisingly, the life
expectancy in Indonesia
saw a significant increase to 14.1 years
. In contrast
to U.S. only grew 3.2 years
in that period.Submitted by syah.lian.ju on
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