These days more fathers stay at home and take care of their children while mothers go out to work. What could be the reasons for this? Do you think it is a positive or a negative development?
Nowadays, it is more evident to see fathers taking care of their children
spending
more Correct word choice
and spending
time
at home. This
essay will give reasons for this
and explain why it is something positive for development, especially for family’s
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family
relationship
and women's social rights.
The first point is that in our society, many more women have jobs. In short, mothers are not able to take care of children because they leave the house during the day. In my opinion, Fix the agreement mistake
relationships
that is
fantastic because being a wife you are in greater conditions than before. In fact, when mothers go out, they are not dependent on their husbands all the time
as they were and have financial freedom, nowadays. For example
, according to
Le Figaro a french
newspaper, in Europe, in 2023, dads Capitalize word
French
spended
on average 7,8 hours in their workplaces and Correct your spelling
spent
womens
7,4.
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women
women's
Secondly
, fathers usually now work less than they were. Consequently
, home’s
family structure is changing because men are able to stay and parents spend equal Correct article usage
the home’s
time
in the house. Also
, the father can spend more time
with his children making a better relationship. For instance
, according to
my uncle, he is happier when he is in Madrid than when he goes to Milan where his company has an office. He argues that in Spain he can spend more time
with his daughter.
In conclusion, in general
parents have now a more equilibrated situation, both can be at home and Add a comma
general,
labor
in the office. I believe that it is something very great that gives the possibility to fix social issues like Change the spelling
labour
women
rights and family’s problems.Change noun form
women's
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coherence cohesion
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The essay showcases clear ideas, particularly when discussing the shift in family roles.
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