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Some universities offer online courses as an alternative to classes delivered on campus. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

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Online-delivered subjects offered by universities in recent times often replace conventional methods
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 and in-person models. The issues of online courses are springing up and led a discord between scholars, not
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 myself, and I assure you that the courses are devastating. Regarding the boredom that may occur during the
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, a more creative approach is needed, and it would
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 energy-consuming than the offline one.
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 who attend a
class
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 online, merely sit down for a long hour in a static circumstance. They cannot have direct interaction with other
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 and their teachers.
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 it is detrimental to the student's spirit, which would affect their performance. It occurs
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 the failure of the environment to provide good stimulation to the
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, a holistic approach is needed in order to
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 these issues. The second respect that may be obstructive to the online-based
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 participants is the fact that the methods are more budget-consuming.
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, teachers need an internet connection ,
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 the
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, to communicate with each other and many
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equipment
 to conduct creative-based classes.
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, the price of internet connection and bandwidth used for conducting the classes is likely springing
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 the increasing demand, so it becomes less affordable.
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, to bring the
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 in a more interactive way, there are many equipment needed to make it possible, which
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 needs a huge amount of cash. In conclusion, imposing an online-based course on a campus
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 not a good way to deliver course materials. So ,
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 method needs to
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 until the readiness of all the
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 is assured. It will prevent the failure in the fuse of
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • flexibility
  • accessibility
  • tuition fees
  • commuting
  • accommodation
  • multimedia
  • interactive tools
  • enhance
  • cater to
  • face-to-face interaction
  • personalized attention
  • complex concepts
  • motivation
  • discipline
  • structure
  • extracurricular activities
  • networking
  • university experience
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