The graph below shows the percentage of part-time workers in each country of the United Kingdom in 1980 and 2010.

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the numbers of people who have part-time jobs in countries that make up the United

Kingdoms

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bothe

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both

in 1980 and 2010.

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, they

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a genally

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genally

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generally

small increase in part-time

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from 1980 to 2010, except for

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Northern

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Ireland

. In 1980, Wales

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the most part-time

workers

up to slightly over 30%, followed by England, which

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almost 25% of

works

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the other two countries, Northern Ireland and Scotland

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the smallest percentage of part-time

workers

, with just 15% and over 10% respectively.

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, in 2010, England, Scotland , and Wales saw an increase in the percentage of people working

part time

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. In England, the percentage rose to above 30% and in Wales

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to just over 35%. In Scotland, it rose

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double

from the past to approximately 20%.

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, the part-time

workers

in the

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Northern

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Ireland

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has

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decrease

smaller

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amount to

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nearly

13%.

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