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The table below shows changes in the numbers of residents cycling to work in different areas of the UK between 2001 and 2011.

The table below shows changes in the numbers of residents cycling to work in different areas of the UK between 2001 and 2011.
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The chart illustrates the evolution of the number of people who use bikes to commute to work in different British locations between two years (2001 and 2011).
Overall
, all the British cities
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 the table had
increase
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 but
specially
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 the inner
London
 has the biggest change with Brighton and Hove and Bristol.
By contrast
, some areas like Leeds, Liverpool and outer
London
, with the lowest percentages, did not make that kind of huge evolution.
Firstly
, in the
table
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 we can see that Inner
London
 has an increase of 144%
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the number of citizens who use bikes to travel to
their
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work. In fact,
this
 location had 43.494 bikers in 2001 and 106.219 in 2011.
Also
, in Brighton and Hove the change is
of
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109% and 94%. in Bristol. Looking at the chart in detail, the areas
wich
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 have the lowest evolution between
this
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 10 years are Leeds with 49%, Liverpool with 48% and outer
London
 with 45%. In those
locations
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 the evolutions
was
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 not that big.
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 in outer
London
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London,
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 the increment compared to Inner
London
 was around 100 points
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per cent lower.
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