IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 7.5

The chart below shows the distribution of different income groups in cities and regional centres of Australia. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make a comparison where relevant.

The chart below shows the distribution of different income groups in cities and regional centres of Australia. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make a comparison where relevant.
✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
The bar chart depicts the classification of various income groups in
cities
Use synonyms
 and regional centres of Australia.
Overall
Linking Words
,
it is clear that
Linking Words
 most
people
Use synonyms
 in the
cities
Use synonyms
 of Australia are categorized in the middle-income class,
while
Linking Words
 the lower middle-income
group
Use synonyms
 has the highest population in regional centres areas.
To begin
Linking Words
 with, the
cities
Use synonyms
 in Australia are mostly dominated by
people
Use synonyms
 who generate salaries in the range of $70,000-$120,000, which accounted for 35%.
Additionally
Linking Words
, the second highest income level is the lower-middle
group
Use synonyms
, which is only 5% below the middle salary
group
Use synonyms
. It is
also
Linking Words
 shown that locals who make money in the range of $120,000 or more are 20% in proportion, which does not have a huge gap compared to the other two mentioned groups.
However
Linking Words
, there is a big difference in the low-income
group
Use synonyms
, which only accounted for less than 15%, becoming the lowest population in Australian
cities
Use synonyms
.
On the other hand
Linking Words
, the regional centres are mostly dominated by
people
Use synonyms
 who only can gain $40,000 - $70,000 per year (34%), followed by the middle earnings category with approximately 26%. In
this
Linking Words
 area, the low-income category
also
Linking Words
 shares a similar portion with approximately 23% of
people
Use synonyms
.
On the contrary
Linking Words
, only 15% of citizens in
this
Linking Words
 region belong to the high-level income
group
Use synonyms
.

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site's author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
▼
Vocabulary: Replace the words cities, people, group with synonyms.
▼
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
▼
What to do next:
Look at other essays: