More and more people are using computers and electric devices to access information, so there is no need for printed books, magazines and newspaper. To what extent do you agree or disagree

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increasing
number of society are choosing computers and electronic
devices
to get any
information
nowadays,
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everything
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digitalized. In fact,
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agree with
this
trend for two main reasons.
Firstly
, electronic
devices
are
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life
changed tools for human
life
.
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invention
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benefit undirectly to save our environment. Since most of the paper
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made from trees, the digital book will be the perfect
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substitution
and decrease number deforestation.
Therefore
, the remaining forest in the world could help to reduce or
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carbon emissions.
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process
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essential to keep our climate temperature below the 1.5 degree threshold. To illustrate, the growing number of digital
devices
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to
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the dropped sales
in
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newspaper
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,
therefore
the newspaper industries
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to
making
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some
innovation
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as
a
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web based
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news
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on news
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.
Secondly
, people
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are
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choose to make their
life more simple
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.
Hence
,
computer
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is consider
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as
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useful device and
make
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our
life
easier.
Moreover
,
computer
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is
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a shopisticated
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shopisticated
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sophisticated
tools
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, we can just search
any
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for any
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information
in
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on
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website
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a website
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in no time, compared with if use
newspaper
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a newspaper
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and have to
looked
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for it by reading
manually
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.
For instance
, people nowadays are using emails to send
any
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information
to others instantly. Compared with paper mail
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we should print it, send
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the office post and wait for several days until the reader
receive
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it. In conclusion, electronic
devices
are not only
environmental
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friendly, but
also
make
people
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life
more easier. I,
therefore
, remain firmly
convienced
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convinced
that
paper based
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books
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and document
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document
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documents
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are not required as a source of
information
.
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