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Due to the increasing world demands for oil and gas energy, people need to look for new resources of energy in remote and untouched natural places. Do the advantages of locating these sources outweigh the disadvantages?

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 similar till 2004. In 2004 the proportion of female
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 55% of
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task achievement
Ensure the essay addresses the actual IELTS question prompt, providing a balanced discussion on the advantages and disadvantages of sourcing energy from remote natural places.
coherence cohesion
Organize the essay with a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion. The introduction should present the topic and your thesis statement. Each body paragraph should contain a clear main idea and supporting details. The conclusion should sum up the arguments presented in the essay.
coherence cohesion
Use a range of cohesive devices to logically connect ideas throughout the essay. Avoid sudden jumps or disjointed statements.
task achievement
Provide specific examples and explanations to support each advantage and disadvantage you discuss in order to strengthen your argument.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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