The bar chart below describes some changes about the percentage of people were born in Australia and who were born outside Australia living in urban, rural and town between 1995 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below describes some changes about the percentage of people were born in Australia and who were born outside Australia living in urban, rural and town between 1995 and 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart gives information regarding the portion of humans who were born in three different
areas
.
Cities
, Towns, and Rural
areas
. In the country of
Australia
this
report for the years 1995 and 2010.
Overall
, in the year 1995 people who were born outside
Australia
experienced a high rate in the
Cities
while
the least portion were in the Towns.
In contrast
, those born in
Australia
are the same in aspects of the
areas
.
In addition
, in the year 2010, Rural
areas
had a dramatic decline for people born outside
Australia
while
those born In
Australia
remained the same for Towns and Rural
areas
. Despite
this
,
Cities
had a rate of 60
percent
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outside
Australia
whereas
in
Australia
increased by 10
percent
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per cent
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,
hence
, Rural
areas
in
Australia
had 30
percent
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per cent
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while
outside
Australia
was 40
percent
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per cent
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. As we can see in the year 2010 both categories who were born in Town and rural
areas
were down sharply
while
those who were born in the
Cities
remain
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remained
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stable inside and outside.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words areas, cities, australia, percent with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Percentage
  • Demographic
  • Trends
  • Urban areas
  • Rural areas
  • Town
  • Native-born
  • Foreign-born
  • Migration patterns
  • Economic factors
  • Government policies
  • Increase
  • Decrease
  • Steady
  • Peak
  • Trough
  • Time frame
  • Significant changes
  • Distribution
  • Notable
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