The chart below gives the information about how families in one country spend their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison when they are relavant.
The bar chart illustrates the way families in a nation spent their weekly income with respect to two different years in the past, 1968 and 2018.
Overall
, there were drastic reductions in terms of the proportion of the money spent by families for
primary needs, Change preposition
on
such
as food, fuel and power, personal goods, and clothing and footware
over around 5 Correct your spelling
footwear
decades
period, Fix the agreement mistake
decade
while
more money was instead
spent for
current trend products and services, like housing, transport, and leisure in 2018 compared with what happened approximately 50 years ago.
Another noticeable feature from the data is that the proportion of weekly income used for food consumption itself Change preposition
on
was
dropped significantly from 35% in 1968 to just around 17.5% in 2018. Unnecessary verb
apply
Furthermore
, fuel and power, clothing and footware
, and personal goods Correct your spelling
footwear
were
all decreased Unnecessary verb
apply
around
2.5%, 5%, and 5% respectively.
Change preposition
by around
In addition
to that, there was a
quite Correct article usage
apply
big
Correct article usage
a big
increased
Replace the word
increase
for
housing and leisure where the former rose by 9% and the latter grew by 12.5% approximately during the years examined in the chart. For Change preposition
in
the
transport, it Correct article usage
apply
was
Unnecessary verb
apply
also
increased by around 5% compared with 1968, even though its difference with the proportion of weekly salary used in 2018 was not as big as the other two mentioned earlier in this
paragraph.Submitted by ravialdyhidayat on
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