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The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The amount of the police
budget
 is presented for
two
 years in the table.
Additionaly
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Additionally
, we can see the pie chart with the percentage of
money
 that was spent on three types of purposes. The figures show that the quantity of the
budget
money
 surged a little,
while
 the percentage of spent
money
 didn't show dramatic
change
.
Firstly
, we can see in the table a slight increase in
two
 sources of the
budget
money
. National
Goverment
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government
 grew from 175.5m in 2017 to 177.8m in 2018.
As well as
National
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the National
show examples
Goverment
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government
 source increased, there was
a
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apply
show examples
little
change
 in Local Taxes
source
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sources
show examples
.
This
 source experienced a slight growth from 91.2m in 2017 to 102.3m in 2018. As for
money
 spent, the most obvious
change
 was for
technology
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the technology
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sector
. The proportion of
money
spended
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spent
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 on
this
sector
rosed
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rose
show examples
 from 8% to 14%. At the same
time
Add a comma
time,
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 there was a
dicrease
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decrease
 in
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the
show examples
a
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the
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salaries
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salaried
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sector
. In 2018 there
were
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was
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 less
money
 spent on
this
sector
, the proportion dropped from 75% in 2017 to 69% in 2018. To summarize, the given information clearly
demonstrate
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demonstrates
show examples
 a little
change
 in the amount of
money
 in
police
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the police
show examples
budget
 with
increasing
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an increase
show examples
 in
two
 sources.
On the other hand
, there were
two
 changes in
secotrs
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sectors
 where
money
were
Change the verb form
was
show examples
 spent.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words budget, two, money, change, m, sector with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Fiscal allocations
  • Revenue streams
  • Budgetary oversight
  • Expenditure
  • Financial appropriation
  • Government grants
  • Local taxation
  • Operational costs
  • Capital investment
  • Public safety
  • Crime prevention
  • Community policing
  • Resource allocation
  • Year-on-year comparison
  • Budgetary constraints
  • Fiscal year
  • Fund disbursement
  • Budget deficit/surplus
  • Trend analysis
  • Financial sustainability
  • Law enforcement funding
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