Learning English at school is often seen as more important than learning local languages. If these are not taught, many are at risk of dying out. In your opinion, is it important for everyone to learn English? Should we try to ensure the survival of local languages and, if so, how?

Educational facilities
predominalty
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predominantly
predominately
focus on teaching
English
rather than
languages
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of the surrounding locality.
This
practice could lead to the demise of
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speech. In
this
essay, I will discuss why it is
both
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equally important to preserve
local
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dialect
as well as
have good
English
skills.
Firstly
,
English
is a universal
tongue
and the vast majority of
countires
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countries
counties
across the globe utilize
this
dialect. By having good conversational skills you open the doors of opportunity.
Furthermore
, the majority of occupations that require proficiency in
this
language are of top positions which will lead to a higher income.
This
is attractive to both employers and
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as
,
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more people will work in that country and boost the economy.
Secondly
, fluency in
this
tongue
reduces feelings of inferiority or unconscious bias.
This
is because
,
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many people associate
this
form of communication with a brilliant background of education.
Therefore
, you will automatically be seen as on par with your colleagues and any superiority complexes will be negated.
On the other hand
, the preservation of
native
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tongue
is crucial to that nation’s history and culture. Local forms of expression are enriched with that
societies’
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culture and are a direct representation of the people.
Proficency
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Proficiency
in local speech is a means of bringing communities together, particularly those who share similar
characteristic
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characteristics
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and cultural mannerisms. To ensure that words that are native to
a
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land are preserved, governments should make it mandatory that they
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formally taught in schools and higher education
centers
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.
Additionally
, grandparents and parents should make efforts to pass on their mother
tongue
to their offspring
thus
ensuring it lives on through them. In conclusion, whilst it is important to know
English
, it is equally as important that native speech
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preserved in order for
a nations culture and history
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a nation's culture and history
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to live on.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • global communication
  • economic opportunities
  • cultural diversity
  • endangered
  • linguistic heritage
  • inclusive
  • multilingualism
  • language revitalization
  • language policy
  • language preservation
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