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The following chart shows the results of British survey taken in 2009 related to Housing preferences of UK people.

The following chart shows the results of British survey taken in 2009 related to Housing preferences of UK people.
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The bar chart compares information about which kind of buildings citizens of 3 different cities (
Liverpool
,
London
,
Manchester
)
prefered
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preferred
 for
live
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life
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 during 2009.
It is clear that
 Apartments
was
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were
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 the most popular choice in
Liverpool
,
while
 people in
London
 and
Manchester
prefered
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preferred
 semi-detached
houses
 were
widespred
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widespread
 among people in
London
 and
Manchester
.
While
 Terraced
houses
 were the least used in all of the 3 places. In
Liverpool
 Apartments were
choosen
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chosen
 by just under 60
percent
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per cent
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 of humans,
that
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which
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 was almost double the number of citizens
of
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in
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London
. The
another
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other
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 common type of
houses
ware
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are
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 semi-detached
houses
. They were
preferable
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preferred
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 by more than 30
percent
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per cent
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 of
reridents
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residents
 of
London
 and
Manchester
 and by nearly 20
percent
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per cent
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 of
Liverpool
.
By contrast
, a minority percentage of citizens chose Terraced
houses
, it
were
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was
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 survived by not more than 20
percent
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per cent
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 of residents.
While
 Detached
Houses
 were selected by 15 
percent
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per cent
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, 25
percend
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per cent
 and 35
percent
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per cent
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 in
Liverpool
,
London
,
Manchester
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and Manchester
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 respectively.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words liverpool, london, manchester, houses, percent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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