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The following chart shows the results of British survey taken in 2009 related to Housing preferences of UK people.

The following chart shows the results of British survey taken in 2009 related to Housing preferences of UK people.
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The bar chart compares information about which kind of buildings citizens of 3 different cities (
Liverpool
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,
London
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,
Manchester
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)
prefered
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preferred
 for
live
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 during 2009.
It is clear that
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 Apartments
was
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were
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 the most popular choice in
Liverpool
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,
while
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 people in
London
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 and
Manchester
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prefered
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preferred
 semi-detached
houses
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 were
widespred
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widespread
 among people in
London
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 and
Manchester
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.
While
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 Terraced
houses
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 were the least used in all of the 3 places. In
Liverpool
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 Apartments were
choosen
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chosen
 by just under 60
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percent
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per cent
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 of humans,
that
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which
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 was almost double the number of citizens
of
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in
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London
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. The
another
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other
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 common type of
houses
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ware
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are
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 semi-detached
houses
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. They were
preferable
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preferred
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 by more than 30
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percent
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per cent
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 of
reridents
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residents
 of
London
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 and
Manchester
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 and by nearly 20
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percent
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per cent
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 of
Liverpool
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.
By contrast
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, a minority percentage of citizens chose Terraced
houses
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, it
were
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was
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 survived by not more than 20
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percent
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per cent
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 of residents.
While
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 Detached
Houses
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 were selected by 15 
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percent
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per cent
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, 25
percend
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per cent
 and 35
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percent
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per cent
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 in
Liverpool
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,
London
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,
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Manchester
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and Manchester
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 respectively.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words liverpool, london, manchester, houses, percent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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