Libraries should be shut down as better alternatives are available. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Libraries
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should not be closed because in
this
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modern era of technology majority of
people
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do not have access to
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of
library
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.
Libraries
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are very useful for every
person
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in every field
either
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whether
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it is study or work. There are many types of
libraries
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in the cities nowadays like digital, hardcopy based, public
library
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, private
library
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,
library
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of some organisations. Different
kind
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kinds
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of
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person
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people
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likes
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like
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different kinds
library
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which they
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useful. The
person
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who
do
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not have enough money
for purchasing
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to purchase
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the
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apply
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electronic goods
such
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as
laptop
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a laptop
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, smart phone etc. wants to read
the
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books,
newspapers
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, magazines etc. free of cost and go to the
library
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either to study books or to read
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but
on the other hand
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, those who have electronic gazets want to read books, newspaper, magazines etc. at the comfort of their home taking tea or coffee.
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all business
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person
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people
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, doctors, researchers,
engineers
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and engineers
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use digital
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library
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libraries
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for reading
newspapers
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either at their
office
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offices
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or at home. If the
government
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of a
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shuts down the
libraries
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of the
country
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then
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majority
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the majority
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of the
people
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will not be able to read
newspapers
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, so in that case, they will
unaware
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of the
government
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policies, laws etc. as they will not be in touch
of
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with
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the
newspapers
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.
Library
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is a link between the
government
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and the poor
people
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for sharing news,laws etc.,
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these should not be closed for the better future of the
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. All the developed countries in the world have given easy access to
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people
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by launching programmes like
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library
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libraries
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at their doorstep or
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library
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libraries
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in their
pocket
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pockets
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. The
government
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should take
necessary
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the necessary
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steps for
the
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easy access to the
library
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so that it should be
accesible
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accessible
by each and every
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of
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in
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the
country
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by providing free
smart phones
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smartphones
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or laptops or tabs and should increase the internet facility everywhere like at railway stations, metro stations, inside the trains and at
market
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the market
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place or in the parks.
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