The bar chart below shows the average Australian water consumption in selected cities for last year. The pie chart shows the distribution of Australian water consumption for last year.

The bar chart below shows the average Australian water consumption in selected cities for last year. The pie chart shows the distribution of Australian water consumption for last year.
The pie
chart
illustrates
allocation
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the allocation
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of
water
consumption
in Australia for the
last
year,
whereas
the
bart
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bar
chart
demonstrates
consumption
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the consumption
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of
water
in selected Australian cities for the same period of time as
previous
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the previous
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chart
.
Overall
, the highest percentage of
water
usage in Australia goes for agricultural purposes.
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, only
a
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half of the cities have
consumption
over 200 k/p. By far the least
water demanding
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water-demanding
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activity is mining which makes up only 2 percent in comparison with the leader it is about
thirty three
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times smaller. It is worth mentioning the fact that agriculture makes up
two thirds
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two-thirds
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of
the
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Australia’s
water
usage. Same as agriculture, Perth is the largest source of
water
consumption
with almost 300 k/p, which is around two times over Canberra, the lowest contributor to the bar
chart
.
Also
, the difference between Perth and Brisbane, the second largest
water
consumer, is about fifty k/p, which means that Brisbane is 5/6 of Perth.
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