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The illustrations show how chocolate is produced. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

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The flow chart gives information about the steps and equipment involved in the process of making chocolate.
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, the process has a number of different stages, starting from harvesting ripe red pods from
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 trees and ending with delivering products to consumers.
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, ripe red pods are harvested from
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 trees grown in South America, Africa, and Indonesia. When separated, the
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 beans are found inside the pods.
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 stage is complete, the beans are incubated until fermentation, and they are spread in the sun to dry. Once the sun has been exposed to the beans, they are placed in large sacks. After that, the large sacks are transported by train or lorry to the factory. After arriving at the factory,
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 particles are roasted at a temperature of 350°F. Once the final
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 has been crushed, the chocolate outer shell is removed.
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 process before the inner part is pressed, and liquid chocolate is produced.

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coherence and cohesion
Ensure you maintain a clear logical structure in your writing. A division of the process into distinct stages can enhance understanding.
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Consider including a brief conclusion summarizing the overall process to provide a complete response.
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Try to include more specific details or comparisons between different stages of chocolate production to enhance your examples.
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The essay provides a good overview of the stages involved in chocolate production, following the process logically.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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