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the chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities

the chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities
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The bar graph provides information about
people
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's habits and preferences for drinking warm beverages
such
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 as
tea
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 and
coffee
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 in
five
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 cities in
Australia
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. The data compares figures about the percentages of
people
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 in
five
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 different cities in
Australia
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.
Overall
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, among cities in
Australia
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, most individuals preferred to go to a
coffee
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 shop to purchase
tea
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 and
coffee
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. It can
also
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 be noted that
people
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 who want
instant
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coffee
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 are their least
favorite
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favourite
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. In detail, most
people
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 living in
Austraila
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Australia
, Melbourne, and
Hobart
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 go to the
coffee
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 shop to buy
tea
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 and
coffee
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 in the
last
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 4 weeks, accounting for approximately 64% and 63%, respectively. Followed by Sydney at roughly 62%, followed next by
Hobart
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 at almost 55%.
Whereas
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, in Adelaide, it has the lowest percentage at 55%. A different pattern can be seen among the
five
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 places in
Australia
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 where most of them like
instant
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coffee
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.
Hobart
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 has the highest proportion of individuals drinking
instant
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coffee
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, at around 54%.
While
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 almost 53% of Brisbanens drink hot
instant
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coffee
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 or
tea
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. It is
also
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 clear that
people
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 in Adelaide are into
instant
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coffee
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 or
tea
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 at exactly 50%, followed by
Melobourn
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Melbourne
 at around 48%. Sydney has the lowest figure, at a little over 45%, drinking warm beverages. An opposite pattern can be seen among
people
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 who prefer to drink fresh
coffee
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 or
tea
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 in
five
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 places in
Australia
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 in the
last
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 four weeks. Melbourne has the highest percentage, at roughly 42%. Followed next in Sydney at exactly 40%.
Whereas
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 in Melbourne and Brisbane, the rate of
people
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 drinking fresh
tea
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 or
coffee
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 is 35% each. It is
also
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 documented that
Hobart
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 has the slowest number of
people
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, at 38%, who prefer fresh
coffee
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 and
tea
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, last, whereas".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words people, tea, coffee, five, australia, instant, hobart with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "roughly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • survey results
  • coffee and tea buying habits
  • instant coffee
  • fresh coffee
  • cafe culture
  • social influences
  • economic factors
  • city demographics
  • seasonal trends
  • marketing strategies
  • consumer preferences
  • availability
  • popularity
  • consumption patterns
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