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Some people consider prices as most important thing to think about when buying product (such as cell phone) or service (eg. medical treatment). Do you agree or disagree

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Over the
last
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 two or three decades,
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product's
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the product's
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price
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 has increased rapidly as compared to the past.
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, Some think that
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product's
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the product's
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 cost is the utmost important to think about when
buy
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buying
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things
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. I partially agree with
this
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 statement and
this
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 essay discusses it briefly for the following reasons.
To begin
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 with,
price
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 is the deciding factor when
people
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 purchase
things
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 because all
people
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 are not financially
stae
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safe
 to buy
things
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 without
consider
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considering
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 money.
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, some products have minimum features but the
price
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 is higher
while
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people
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 think bout
this
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product
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 cost is worthy of the features and models.
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, a recent report
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apply
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done by the Times of India said that more than 80% of
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folks
are considered
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consider
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price
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 before buying products.
In addition
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, buying
things
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 within a budget is the most important of many
individuals
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individuals'
individual's
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thought
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thoughts
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,
hence
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, they consider
price
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 before buying
stuffs
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stuff
kinds of stuff
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.
Nevertheless
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,
price
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 is not
only
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the only
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 to be considered
that
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apply
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before purchasing
things
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, there are some other factors
also
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.
Quality
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 of the
service
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 and
product
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 are the most important than
price
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 because these
provides
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provide
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 more satisfaction and
long
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are long
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 lasting.
Furyhermore
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Furthermore
, a good
service
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 or
product
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price
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 is expensive
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while
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people
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 do not think about the
price
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,
in contrast
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, they should consider the
quality
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 of the
service
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 and
product
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.
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, medical expenses are
most
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more
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 expensive than other expenses but the
quality
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 of the treatment can give long years of guarantee.
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,
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quality
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the quality
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 of the
service
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 and
product
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also
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is also
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 to be considered when buying
things
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.
To conclude
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, all
the
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apply
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individuals are not
same
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the same
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 financial status, so, many public look
on
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at
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 their
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price
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prices
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 first when buying
stuffs
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stuff
kinds of stuff
pieces of stuff
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.
Although
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,
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quality
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the quality
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 of the
service
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product
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 provides
long lasting
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long-lasting
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and
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apply
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satisfaction, so,
people
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 should
also
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 consider
this
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.
Then
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, I partially agree with
this
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 statement in the above-mentioned details.
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coherence cohesion
Develop logical structures between ideas: Use clear topic sentences and make sure each paragraph has a single focus, ensuring a more seamless flow.
coherence cohesion
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coherence cohesion
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