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Some people consider prices as most important thing to think about when buying product (such as cell phone) or service (eg. medical treatment). Do you agree or disagree

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Over the
last
 two or three decades,
product's
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the product's
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price
 has increased rapidly as compared to the past.
However
, Some think that
product's
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the product's
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 cost is the utmost important to think about when
buy
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buying
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things
. I partially agree with
this
 statement and
this
 essay discusses it briefly for the following reasons.
To begin
 with,
price
 is the deciding factor when
people
 purchase
things
 because all
people
 are not financially
stae
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safe
 to buy
things
 without
consider
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considering
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 money.
Additionally
, some products have minimum features but the
price
 is higher
while
people
 think bout
this
product
 cost is worthy of the features and models.
For example
, a recent report
was
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apply
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done by the Times of India said that more than 80% of
the
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apply
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folks
are considered
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consider
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price
 before buying products.
In addition
, buying
things
 within a budget is the most important of many
individuals
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individuals'
individual's
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thought
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thoughts
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,
hence
, they consider
price
 before buying
stuffs
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stuff
kinds of stuff
pieces of stuff
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.
Nevertheless
,
price
 is not
only
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the only
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 to be considered
that
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apply
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before purchasing
things
, there are some other factors
also
.
Quality
 of the
service
 and
product
 are the most important than
price
 because these
provides
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provide
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 more satisfaction and
long
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are long
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 lasting.
Furyhermore
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Furthermore
, a good
service
 or
product
price
 is expensive
while
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apply
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people
 do not think about the
price
,
in contrast
, they should consider the
quality
 of the
service
 and
product
.
For instance
, medical expenses are
most
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more
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 expensive than other expenses but the
quality
 of the treatment can give long years of guarantee.
Therefore
,
quality
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the quality
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 of the
service
 and
product
also
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is also
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 to be considered when buying
things
.
To conclude
, all
the
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apply
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individuals are not
same
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the same
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 financial status, so, many public look
on
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at
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 their
price
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prices
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 first when buying
stuffs
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stuff
kinds of stuff
pieces of stuff
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.
Although
,
quality
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the quality
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 of the
service
product
 provides
long lasting
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long-lasting
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and
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apply
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satisfaction, so,
people
 should
also
 consider
this
.
Then
, I partially agree with
this
 statement in the above-mentioned details.
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coherence cohesion
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coherence cohesion
Effective introduction and conclusion: Clearly state your position in the introduction and summarize the main points in the conclusion for more impact.
coherence cohesion
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