People today do not feel safe either at home or when they are out. What do you think is the cause of this? What can be done to solve this problem?
Over the
last
two or three decades, people's safety has decreased more tremendously than ever before. These days, people feel unsafe when they are
go out or at Unnecessary verb
apply
home
due to
increasing the rate of crime
by criminals
. It can be solved that
by the strict rules that have to Correct word choice
apply
implement
against the Wrong verb form
be implemented
crime
by the government. This
essay discusses it briefly for the following reasons.
To begin
with, these days, the individual feels unsafe at home
or outside because crime
ratio is increased day-to-day across the world. Correct article usage
the crime
Criminals
are
not Verb problem
do
worked
but they need money to fulfil their needs and Wrong verb form
work
wands
in everyday Correct your spelling
wanders
while
they do crime
activities to satisfy their livelihood with other's money and Replace the word
criminal
assest
. Correct your spelling
assets
asset
assist
For example
, offender's
target only Change noun form
offenders
who
Correct pronoun usage
those who
lives
alone at Correct subject-verb agreement
live
home
, especially elders and who
Correct determiner usage
those who
goes
alone outside Correct subject-verb agreement
go
while
criminals
do robbery
, Wrong verb form
rob
consequently
, unsafetyness is raised among the populace.
However
, the government should be implemented
Wrong verb form
implement
a strict rules
against these kinds of Correct the article-noun agreement
strict rules
a strict rule
criminals
by
strict rules which Change preposition
so
criminals
will not become reoffenders
. Some kind of offenders Correct your spelling
offenders
consently
do Correct your spelling
consistently
crime
activities to Replace the word
criminal
robber
Replace the word
rob
other's
money, Change preposition
other of
jewel
and Fix the agreement mistake
jewels
assest
, Correct your spelling
assets
this
kind of criminal should be punished by
severely namely capital Change preposition
apply
punishment
while
people have
more afraid to do any misleading activities. Verb problem
are
For instance
, deadly punishment
will reduce the crime
rate as well as
the criminals
ratio. Replace the word
crime
Therefore
, the authority
should give severe punishments to offenders in order Fix the agreement mistake
authorities
to
the populace can go outside without Change preposition
for
fears
.
Fix the agreement mistake
fear
To conclude
, increasing the rate of crimes and criminals
are the main causes for the population do
not Unnecessary verb
apply
feel
.safe at Fix the infinitive
to feel
home
or when they out
. Add a missing verb
are out
Although
, capital punishment
and severe punishment
should be implemented against the law breaker
by the authorities in order to Correct your spelling
lawbreaker
sove
Correct your spelling
solve
save
this
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