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The tables below give information about sales of Fairtrade- labelled coffee and bananas in 1999 and 2004 in five European countries.

The tables below give information about sales of Fairtrade- labelled coffee and bananas in 1999 and 2004 in five European countries.
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The tables compare five European
countries
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 in terms of the cost of fair sales of
coffee
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 and
bananas
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 by farmers over a period of 5
years
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.
It is clear that
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Switzerland
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 was by far the most peculiar country for the sales of both
bananas
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 and
coffee
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 in 1999. Belgium had a striking rise in the sale of
bananas
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 in 2004. Over 5
years
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 UK overtook
Switzerland
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 for the highest rate of sold
coffee
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. In 1999,
Switzerland
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 was the main trader of
coffee
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 among European
countries
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, with 3 million
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euros
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 and its figure raised twice time in 2004. What stands out is the sharp increase of selling
coffee
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 in the UK from 1.5
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millions
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million
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of
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euros
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 to 20
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millions
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million
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euros
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 by 2004. Belgium went up from 1 to 1.7 and the other two
countries
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 had a minor rise of 0.2
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millions
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million
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of
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euro during
this
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 period. The vending of
bananas
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 in two European
countries
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, Sweden and Denmark dramatically decreased from 1.8 and 2 to 1 and 0.9
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millions
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million
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euros
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 respectively.
By contrast
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,
UK
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the UK
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 and Belgium saw a substantial upward at about six times in the early
years
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 of the 20th century. By far the most dramatic progress in the trading of
bananas
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 was for
Switzerland
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 which put up to 47
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millions
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million
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euros
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 after five
years
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words countries, coffee, bananas, years, switzerland, euros, millions with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "dramatically" was used 2 times.
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