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The graph below shows how much money a city council gave to book clubs over a four-year period. summarise the information by selecting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows how much money a city council gave to book clubs over a four-year period. summarise the information by selecting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph below compares the proportion of
money
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 a city council gave to
book
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 clubs and the figure for
book
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club
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members
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 over a period of four years.
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, the number of
book
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club
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members
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 and the amount of
money
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 given increased over time. Having looked at the chart given for more details, in
year
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 1, the number of
book
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club
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members
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 saw a slight decrease. In
year
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 2, it
continued
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 fall to 5000. One
year
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 later,
book
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club
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members
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 in numbers had a big
increased
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 from 5000 to 10000, which has reached
it
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 highest peak and in
year
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 4, the number of
book
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club
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members
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 rose gradually. Regarding the amount of
money
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 given, in
year
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 1 witnessed
increase
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 slightly to
year
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 2 was 22,500£. In
year
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 3, the
money
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 given amount rose dramatically to 40,000£. One hour later, it decreased gradually to 35,000£.

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Linking words: Add more linking words.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 77%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words money, book, club, members, year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "gave" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
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