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The graph below shows how much money a city council gave to book clubs over a four-year period. summarise the information by selecting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows how much money a city council gave to book clubs over a four-year period. summarise the information by selecting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph below compares the proportion of
money
 a city council gave to
book
 clubs and the figure for
book
club
members
 over a period of four years.
Overall
, the number of
book
club
members
 and the amount of
money
 given increased over time. Having looked at the chart given for more details, in
year
 1, the number of
book
club
members
 saw a slight decrease. In
year
 2, it
continued
Add the particle
continued to
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 fall to 5000. One
year
 later,
book
club
members
 in numbers had a big
increased
Replace the word
increase
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 from 5000 to 10000, which has reached
it
Change the pronoun
its
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 highest peak and in
year
 4, the number of
book
club
members
 rose gradually. Regarding the amount of
money
 given, in
year
 1 witnessed
increase
Correct article usage
an increase
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 slightly to
year
 2 was 22,500£. In
year
 3, the
money
 given amount rose dramatically to 40,000£. One hour later, it decreased gradually to 35,000£.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 77%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words money, book, club, members, year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "gave" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
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