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The pie chart shows a group of nutritional ingredients, namely carbohydrates, protein and fat in three different categories.

The pie chart shows a group of nutritional ingredients, namely carbohydrates, protein and fat in three different categories.
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The diagrams illustrate the proportion of
carbohydrates
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,
protein
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, and fat in three diverse categories.
Overall
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,
carbohydrates
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Correct subject-verb agreement
are
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is
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are
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 the highest amount of nutritional
ingridients
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ingredients
. At
first,
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in
average
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the average
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 diet,
Carbohydrates
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 have
a
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the
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 same large as
Protein
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 with a number of 40%.
In contrast
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 to Fat, it is twice
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as smaller
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smaller
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small
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 as others which stands at 20%.
On the other hand
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,
a
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apply
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half of
diagram
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the diagram
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 in
healthy
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a healthy
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 diet
fills
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is filled
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by
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with
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Carbohydrates
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,
while
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 the rest of it
is consist
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consists
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 of
Protein
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 and Fat.
According to
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 the data,
Protein
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 has a slight difference with 10% above Fat.
Lastly
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,
compare
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compared
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 to all of the charts,
Carbohydrates
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 for sport
is
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are
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 the widest proportion
that
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apply
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reach
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reaching
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 60%.
Moreover
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, there is
significant
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a significant
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 difference between
Carbohydrates
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 and Fat in
category
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the category
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 of
healthy
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a healthy
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 diet for sport, with a 45%
of
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apply
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gap.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words carbohydrates, protein with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "diagrams" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "difference" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • nutritional ingredients
  • carbohydrates
  • protein
  • fat
  • distribution
  • percentage
  • trends
  • dietary suggestions
  • nutritional needs
  • guidelines
  • historical context
  • situational context
  • variations
  • dietary habits
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