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The bar chart below shows estimated world illiteracy rates by region and by gender for the last year.

The bar chart below shows estimated world illiteracy rates by region and by gender for the last year.
The Bar Chart illustrate the roughly calculated
world not educated
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world-educated
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 people rate by region and by sex for the
last
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 year. The Chart shows that Developed countries have a very low rate of
illiteracy
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while
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on the other hand
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, South Asia has the most. Especially the
women
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 are the most uneducated. With the help of Graph, we can easily see why countries are ahead of the world because they have the lowest
illiteracy
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 rate and
then
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 the Caribbean countries came with 2nd place. in the 3rd bar we can see in East Asia females are more likely educated than males and take the 3rd place in the graph. In
4th
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the 4th
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 spot, Sub-Saharan Africa came where the
women
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 are again ahead of male in education.
in 2nd
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In the second
last
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 bar we can see in Arab states men are behind the
women
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 in
illiteracy
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. South Asia
come
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at the end
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 with the most percentage of uneducated people. The
overall
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 graph shows that
women
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 are more likely interested in getting the education and they have a lower ratio of
illiteracy
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 than men.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words illiteracy, women with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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