People buy good products that work; therefore, advertising is unnecessary and is no more than a form of entertainment. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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These days
people
like to have
a
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high-quality
product
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products
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so they look for them by searching on a website or their relatives. It is often claimed that
community
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the community
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want the best
product
in
market
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so
advertisement
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advertisements
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does
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not influence
on
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this
group of
people
and some folks look the
advertisement
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advertisements
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as a hobby.
While
advertisement
sometimes has side
effect
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effects
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, in my
opinion
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it is necessary to notice them. To commence with,
advertisement
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advertisements
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can improve public awareness about the quality of a
product
.
Advertisements
always introduce
their
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materials that use them so
people
can choose and select between a great number of products because somebody
has
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allergic to some materials and
people
can
aware
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with
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the
advertisement
.
For instance
, a person has a sensitive tooth so he or she should definitely choose a toothbrush that
fit
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with his tooth and
this
issue
appear
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in its
advertisement
.
thus
a
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advertisement
can help a person to choose the best products.
Moreover
,
advertisement
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advertisements
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can increase revenue and sales. Technology is an inseparable part of our lives; technology has accelerated task accomplishments and
also
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it has facilitated our lives. These days we see a wide variety of
advertisements
with different methods on the TV or on
the
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social media
such
as Telegram or Instagram so thanks to the internet that
provide
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a background for each person to search any
things
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anything
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and be aware of
a
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quality of a
product
. Because of technology, a lot of factories and organizations attract many consumers.
For example
last
day I saw a billboard on the highway that was
a
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advertisement
about
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toothpaste so I decided to buy it under the influence of the
advertisement
.
therefore
advertisements
are useful both for consumers and producers.
However
, it can not be denied that
advertisements
sometimes deceive
the
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consumers and
some times
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sometimes
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they create a fake need because it may increase consumerism. Despite
this
, I still believe that
advertisements
can bring about many merits. By way of conclusion, it appears to me that
advertisement
is a useful method that
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to the market and has a lot of
benefit
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both for
customer
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the customer
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and
factory
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the factory
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.
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Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

  • for example
  • for instance
  • to illustrate this
  • to give a clear example
  • such as
  • namely
  • to illustrate
  • take, for example

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