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The chart below shows what Anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree course. The table shows the salaries of the anthropologists in work after five years. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows what Anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree course. The table shows the salaries of the anthropologists in work after five years. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie chart provides information about what Anthropology students did after completing their tertiary institution
whereas
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 the table illustrates the amount of money each graduate earned after a period of five years.
Overall
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, it can be seen that the majority of pupils were full-time workers
while
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 the least of them were part-time workers
as well as
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 postgraduates.
In addition
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, people who worked in government institutions had the highest salary
while
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 those in the private sector received lower incomes.
To begin
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 with, 52% of the students participated in a full-time job which was the highest number recorded.
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, those involved in full-time study
as well as
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 unknown pupils had the same percentage, 8% each.
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, few of them showed an interest in part-time work.
By contrast
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, after a period of five years,
although
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 government employees had a few percentages in the lowest ranging scale ,
however
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 , their earnings were higher in the highest scale with 10%.
Moreover
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, freelance consultant's salaries improved, in fact just 5% in the lower range and 40% in the highest range. In stark contrast, private workers' salaries were not encouraging, they recorded 10% in the initial range and still remained the lowest in the final s

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "as well as, moreover, while".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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