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The graph below shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries.

The graph below shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries.
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The line chart
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illustrates
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precentage
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percentage
 of people aged 65 and over from 1940 to 2040 in three
type
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countries
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, namely
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Japan,
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Sweden and the USA.
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ederly
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elderly
 population
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steady
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from
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 1940,
while
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 expectancy is predicted to rise significantly until 2040. Looking for more details, the rate of
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individuals
 who are
ederly
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elderly
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Japan has
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 significantly from 5 % to over 25%.
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 aged 65 and over in
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Sweden rise gradually
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 around 7% to under 20% and in Japan will
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 2040. Regarding
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the number of people aged 65 and over in the USA
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increase
steady
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 from around 10% to around 17% from 1940 to 2023.
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Furthermore
, the prediction of
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the rate
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 of
polupation
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population
 aged 65 and over in the USA will
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at
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 17% to above 20% from 2023 to 2040.
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