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The best for the government to solve the problem of traffic congestion is providing free public transport per day, 7 day a week. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

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Over the
last
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 two or three decades,
traffic
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congestion
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 has increased more tremendously than ever before
due to
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 increasing the ownership of
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cars.
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, some say that the
traffic
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issuse
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issues
issue
 can be solved by providing
the
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free public
transportation
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of
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 the whole week. I strongly disagree with
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 notion and
this
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To begin
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 with, providing free public
transportation
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service
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 will not solve the
traffic
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issue
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 because
people
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 have
own
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their own
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car
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cars
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 and
truck
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trucks
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while
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 they can spend more money on
fuels
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fuel
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 which means folks are financially stable, so, giving free public
transportation
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service
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 cannot encourage
to
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them to
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use
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buses
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instead
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 of cars.
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, the authority should improve the public
transportation
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service
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, and
as a result
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, the population will
use
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 these
vehicles
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 for
travel
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 in order to reduce the
congestion
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.
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,
people
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 like to
travel
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with
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more
comfortable
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 and
convenient
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,
therefore
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, the
buses
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 and trains should be fulfilled these like own
vehicles
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.
Hence
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, free bus
travel
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 cannot solve the
traffic
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issue
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 indeed.
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, increasing the number of
the
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public transport
vehicles
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that
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might solve the
congestion
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issue
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instead
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 of free public
transportation
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service
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.
This
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 is because
people
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 do not wait for longer hours to take free
vehicle
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vehicles
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 to reach their
desire
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 destination.
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, many frequent
buses
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 within hours
people
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 might
use
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the
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public
transportation
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instead
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 of
own
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their own
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vehicle
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vehicles
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 unlikely free
buses
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 cannot solve
traffic
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 and folks will not
use
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 these
vehicles
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 for
travel
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 even if free.
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, providing free public
transportation
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 for individuals will not solve the
congestion
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issue
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due to
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 increasing the quantity of
the
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vehicles
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 and improving
the
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public
transportation
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 only
stimulate
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 to
use
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buses
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of buses
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 and trains
instead
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 of cars and vans.
Therefore
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, I strongly disagree with
this
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Coherence & Cohesion
Ensure each paragraph has one clear main idea and that supporting details are directly relevant to the topic. Linking words should be used appropriately to connect ideas across the essay.
Coherence & Cohesion
Expand further on given ideas with more detailed explanations and examples. Strive for balance in discussing both sides of the argument if the prompt asks to what extent you agree or disagree.
Task Achievement
Provide specific, relevant examples to support the ideas presented in the essay. Try to ensure that examples are detailed and enhance the argument.
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Aim for greater development of ideas throughout the essay, which may include deeper analysis, wider implications, or considering different perspectives.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • traffic congestion
  • alleviating
  • eco-friendlier
  • densely populated
  • feasibility
  • reallocate
  • overcrowding
  • complementary solutions
  • cycling infrastructure
  • carpooling
  • congestion charges
  • urban sprawl
  • urban planning
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