Some people spend most of their lives living close to where they were born. What might be the reasons for this? What are the advantages and disadvantages?
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people
like to live where they were born. That provide
many advantages and disadvantages. The following paragraph will discuss Correct subject-verb agreement
provides
about
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.
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of
the
living own Correct article usage
apply
places
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place
places
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that is
more safety and relax
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relaxed
also
happy. Own Correct word choice
and also
places
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most humans. City or town no matter. but Replace the word
comfort to
people
prefer to live with relatives. That is
very nice. For example
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Nowadays
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young
people
going to other country
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other countries
live
. That means no problem Replace the word
life
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country peoples
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countries people
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very
other country
.
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another country
other countries
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are living small
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in small
city
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cities
village
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villages
place
, then
they can develop their life style
, foods, studies Correct your spelling
lifestyle
also
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like to live their
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in their
place
. So they do not develop their skills and knowledge, these are the
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apply
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place
give many experiences is
very special.
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that is
places
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. That provide
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people
whare
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where
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safety
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is loving with people
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