Some people spend most of their lives living close to where they were born. What might be the reasons for this? What are the advantages and disadvantages?
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modern
era, Part of Add an article
the modern
the
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apply
people
like to live where they were born. That provide
many advantages and disadvantages. The following paragraph will discuss Correct subject-verb agreement
provides
about
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apply
this
.
On the one hand, first will see the benefits about
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of
the
living own Correct article usage
apply
places
. Part of the humans love their born Fix the agreement mistake
place
places
. because,
they feel Remove the comma
apply
that is
more safety and relax
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relaxed
also
happy. Own Correct word choice
and also
places
can give comfortable
most humans. City or town no matter. but Replace the word
comfort to
people
prefer to live with relatives. That is
very nice. For example
, Now a days
more Correct the word
Nowadays
jung
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young
people
going to other country
to work or study. But they said after going, our hometown is very good for Change the wording
another country
other countries
live
. That means no problem Replace the word
life
languages
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with languages
understand
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to understand
country peoples
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countries people
place
is vey
well than Correct your spelling
very
other country
.
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another country
other countries
On the other hand
, if living born places
, that give more drawbacks, not all people
are living town. More people
are living small
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in small
city
and Fix the agreement mistake
cities
village
, so they feel bad. Because they think when we change the born Fix the agreement mistake
villages
place
, then
they can develop their life style
, foods, studies Correct your spelling
lifestyle
also
everything. For instance
, more people
like to live their
own Change preposition
in their
place
. So they do not develop their skills and knowledge, these are the
not good. Change the article
apply
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the living Wrong verb form
Changing
place
give many experiences is
very special.
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that is
places
. Some are living own places
. That provide
many advantages. Correct subject-verb agreement
provides
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reason is Add an article
The main
people
whare
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where
living
is comfortable and Replace the word
live
safety
and all the facilities are available, that Replace the word
safe
place
is loving with people
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