The bar chart below shows the average monthly maximum temperatures for three Australian cities in the year 2016. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below shows the average monthly maximum temperatures for three Australian cities in the year 2016.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The assigned bar chart
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the monthly
temperature
of minimum and maximum by Australian
cities
in the
year
2016. These three
cities
are
Melbourne
,
Darwin
and
Perth
. It is evident from
bar
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chart that the
most
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highest
temperature
was seen in
Darwin
in the
month
of November
it
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was 33.3%
and
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at the beginning of Jan to April it was slightly
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at
the
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degree Celsius of 32.7% and from May it's remain
was
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down the mid of
year
the months of June and July it were constant approximately 30.6 to 30.5%.
afterthat
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after that
, rapid growth in
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graph from August to December. Probing ahead,
Melbourne
and
Perth
were
same
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pattern
follow
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followed
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in the
year
of 2016.
Melbourne
had no
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in Frist two months
of
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Jan and Feb
whereas
March to July gradually decreased at
the
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temperature
of 13.4%.
Noticably
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Noticeably
in the
month
of June, July and
August
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August,
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all three
cities
were
same
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temperature
in
Darwin
and
Perth
it
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was (about 30.6, 30.5 to 31.3% and 19.2, 18.8 to 19% respectively). Eventually, in the initial
months
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both two provinces
were
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downward
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a downward
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trend saw till the
month
of July after it
was
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gradually increased in December
month
.
Overall
, In
Melbourne
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Melbourne,
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erratic pattern was
saw
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seen
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and
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the most
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most
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highest
temperature
was in the
month
of November as compared to
other
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the other
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two
cities
. Meanwhile,
Darwin
and
Perth
were
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had
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same
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the same
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pattern
followed it
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following
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was downward and upward trend in the
year
.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words temperature, cities, year, melbourne, darwin, perth, month with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "downward" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.
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