Many people no longer read newspapers or watch TV news programmes. Instead they get news about the world from the Internet. Is this a positive or negative development?

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or
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watching TV has become unpopular among
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.
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, they get informed about the world owing to the
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. I think it will have a positive impact on citizens,
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, the negative side is possible as well.
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with, with the advent of the
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society may get
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with ease. Saying thoroughly,
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internet
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is a platform where various
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from diverse countries you can find and read.
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, it allows you to be always connected with the world.
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, the
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has become so fast that within a few
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you receive plenty of information regarding the topic
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for.
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, my friend and I almost every day get fresh
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from social sites
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as Instagram,
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, to name just a few.
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, the
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might be considered as the best way to receive information from all over the world. On the flip side,
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reading
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from
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source
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the public might get deceived as well without
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. To be more clear, nowadays scores of sites publish fake
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and
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especially the elderly who may have
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a lack
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of knowledge in the
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platform follow them.
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, the
news
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from newspapers or from TV is more reliable.
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, once I read on the
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that several
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died
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an earthquake
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in Yerevan, but fortunately nobody died after the disaster. From my point of view,
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internet
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has its pros and cons.To avoid fake
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people
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should only follow reliable and official
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websites
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as BBC or CNN. Taking everything into account, plenty of advantages
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the
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give human-being, regardless of some negative things. So, using the
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should be careful.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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