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In a number of countries, some people think it is necessary to spend large sums of money on constructing new railway line for very fast trains between cities. Other believes the money should be spent on improving existing public transport. Discuss both themanyse views and give you own opinion

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Over the
last
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 two or three decades, transportation has developed more tremendously than ever before. Some claim that the
authority
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 should allocate a plethora of
money
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on
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 building new fast
railway
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 lines between cities
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 others opine that
money
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 should be spent on improving
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public
transport
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. I agree with the latter opinion for the following reasons. On the one hand,
railway
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 lines should be
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 enormously between urban places, so, more amount to be allocated by the authorities.
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 is because, rails can carry a large
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 of passengers
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 goods
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simultaneously, when
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railway
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 tracks
will be
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builded
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while
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 office-goers and pupils can reach their
destination
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 without delays.
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, new
metro
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 rail
lane
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 can be connected between cities, and
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, many people can travel between urban places for work, business and study.
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, the authorities should provide more funds
on
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 building new
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railway
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 tracks.
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, the government should
be spent
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money
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 on improving
the
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public
transport
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.
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 means, increasing the quantity of the vehicles and increasing the quality of the vehicles, thereby, many people like to travel these buses and trains.
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, it can
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 to improve the existing transportation service than
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building
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new
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 one because it needs plenty of
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,
hence
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, the authorities should allocate more funds towards
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improving
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to improve
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improving
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the
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public transportation.
To conclude
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,
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 new
metro
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railway
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 lanes will
be
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 easy to travel between cities and
it
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can carry more passengers and goods,
money
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 should be spent on existing public
transport
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 because it can
easy
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 to improve the existing vehicles
instead
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 of
build
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. In my opinion about
this
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, I strongly agree with the latter opinion that
money
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 should spent on the existing public
transport
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.
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