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In a number of countries, some people think it is necessary to spend large sums of money on constructing new railway line for very fast trains between cities. Other believes the money should be spent on improving existing public transport. Discuss both themanyse views and give you own opinion

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Over the
last
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 two or three decades, transportation has developed more tremendously than ever before. Some claim that the
authority
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 should allocate a plethora of
money
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on
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to
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 building new fast
railway
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 lines between cities
while
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 others opine that
money
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 should be spent on improving
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public
transport
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. I agree with the latter opinion for the following reasons. On the one hand,
railway
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 lines should be
builded
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 enormously between urban places, so, more amount to be allocated by the authorities.
This
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 is because, rails can carry a large
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 of passengers
as well as
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 goods
in
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simultaneously, when
metro
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railway
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 tracks
will be
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builded
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built
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while
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 office-goers and pupils can reach their
destination
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 without delays.
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, new
metro
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 rail
lane
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 can be connected between cities, and
as a result
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, many people can travel between urban places for work, business and study.
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, the authorities should provide more funds
on
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 building new
metro
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railway
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 tracks.
On the other hand
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, the government should
be spent
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money
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 on improving
the
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public
transport
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.
This
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 means, increasing the quantity of the vehicles and increasing the quality of the vehicles, thereby, many people like to travel these buses and trains.
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, it can
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 to improve the existing transportation service than
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building
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new
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 one because it needs plenty of
money
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,
hence
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, the authorities should allocate more funds towards
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improving
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to improve
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improving
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the
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public transportation.
To conclude
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,
Although
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 new
metro
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railway
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 lanes will
be
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make it
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 easy to travel between cities and
it
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apply
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can carry more passengers and goods,
money
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 should be spent on existing public
transport
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 because it can
easy
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be easy
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 to improve the existing vehicles
instead
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 of
build
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. In my opinion about
this
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, I strongly agree with the latter opinion that
money
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 should spent on the existing public
transport
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.

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coherence cohesion
Ensure logical structure by organizing paragraphs effectively and clearly. Your essay should have a clear introduction, body, and conclusion, each serving its own purpose. Make sure paragraphs flow smoothly with appropriate usage of linking words.
coherence cohesion
Include a succinct introduction that states the essay question and indicates your opinion clearly. Make sure your conclusion restates your main points and reinforces your opinion without presenting new information.
coherence cohesion
Support your main points with focused examples and explanations. Instead of general statements, provide concrete examples to illustrate your arguments and make your essay more compelling.
task achievement
Address all parts of the task and ensure your response is complete. Expand your points fully, providing equal attention to both sides of the argument if the question requires a discussion.
task achievement
Present your ideas clearly and thoroughly. Each paragraph should contain a single clear idea that is developed and supported throughout the paragraph.
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Use appropriate and relevant examples to back up your arguments. Your examples should be specific and directly related to the point you are trying to make.
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