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The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line chart below reveals demographic data of urban citizens in four Asian countries including the Philippines, Malaysia, Thailand and
Indonesia
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 from 1970 to 2020, with forecasts for 2030 and 2040.
Overall
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, the percentage of the population in
cities
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 kept rising from 1970 to the projected year of 2040 in Malaysia and
Indonesia
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, whilst the figure for people living in
cities
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 in the Philippines fluctuated in the given time.
According to
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 the information shown in the graph, there was only 15% of residents living in
cities
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 in
Indonesia
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 in 1970 which was the lowest among all.
However
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, the percentage of the population living in
cities
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 in
Indonesia
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 exceeded that of Thailand and the Philippines respectively after meeting the same point of 25% in 2000 and 40% in 2010. After which, its percentage skyrocketed to almost 6 times higher in the projected year of 2040 than the beginning by 60%.
On the other hand
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, the majority of Malaysians lived in
cities
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 in 1990 which was above 50% and the number kept rising to the estimated 2040 which remained the highest in the four countries at the same time. What should be particularly mentioned is the trend in Thailand plateaued from 1990 to 2020.
To sum up
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, there will be a growing tendency to move to
cities
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 in the four regions based on the predictions.

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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Urbanization
  • Demographics
  • Trend analysis
  • Predictive models
  • Population distribution
  • Percentage change
  • Statistical comparison
  • Growth rate
  • Anomaly
  • Migration
  • Economic development
  • Baseline
  • Continuations
  • Urban population
  • Decline
  • Fluctuation
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