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Information technology enable many people to do their chores outside their workplace (e.g at home or while travelling) do the benefits outweigh the disadvantages

#information #technology #people #chores #workplace #e #g #home
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Now a days
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Nowadays
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 information
technology
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 is playing a vital role in human life across the world and it leads
a
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 important role in the development of
nation
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nations
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 globally but
every thing
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everything
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 is having their own pros and cons which
i
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 will explain
further
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 how
technology
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 is helpful and
also
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 it has a negative
concequences
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consequences
consequence
 as well.
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Technology
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 is very important to all individuals these days and there is no doubt
about
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that
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 sources of
technology
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 rapidly increasing day by day. without electricity , internet life is incomplete .
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example
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 During
pandemic
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the pandemic
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 students
used
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are used
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 to their classes online
therefore
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 it does not
effect
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affect
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on
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apply
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their studies easily pupil
completed
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complete
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 their
course
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courses
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 successfully. Without
computer
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computers
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,
internet
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the internet
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 or
technology
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which
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it
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 was not possible. Through
television
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television,
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 all humans are aware
what
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of what
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 is happening all over the world. On
other
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the other
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 hand , As
i
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I
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 mentioned earlier , each thing
is having their
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has its
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 own drawback whether it is
a
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apply
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technology
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 or any other
tend
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trend
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. these days adults are more active on
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the internet
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internet
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Internet
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 or else they are busy
in
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playing games
in
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on
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 mobile ,
watching
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and watching
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T.V
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TV
 so they do not have enough time to spend with their family which can be a cause of conflict among family members as they are
quiet
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quite
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 busy
in
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technology
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 .
In addition
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 like our grandparents feel isolated in
this
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scenerio
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scenario
. In conclusion ,
i
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I
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 emphasize without
techology
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technology
 life is incomplete . All office employees and household wives
depends
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depend
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 on
techology
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technology
. I believe that the only disadvantage of
this
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 is spending too much
of
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time on it and
this
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 can be controlled by changing our habits.
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The introduction should clearly address the essay question/task, providing a clear position that is maintained throughout the essay. Each body paragraph should contain a clear main idea followed by development and examples.

Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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