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Test 1: The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

Test 1: The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The line chart shows a mean monthly change in the cost of copper,
nickel
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 and zinc in the year 2014. The x-axis indicates the months and
y-axis
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the y-axis
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 depicts
percentage
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the percentage
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 of changes in
prices
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 when compared with
previous
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the previous
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month
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.
Interesting
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, there is a wide range of
shift
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shifts
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 in
prices
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 for all
the
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apply
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three metals. Though copper has a 2% change in price in the
month
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 of January,
but
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it gradually decreases from May to
June
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 by below 1% but there is a sudden peak from
June
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 to July reaching
to
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1%.Surprisingly,
percentage
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the percentage
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 for
nickel
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 starts at 6%
in
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at
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 the beginning of the year
then
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 suddenly drops to -3% in the
month
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 of
June
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 and
reached
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reaches
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 up to -1%
next
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the next
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month
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 by keeping steadily same as
nickel
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 till September and steeped again in October. Though the price variation for zinc
had
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was
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 3% in February it declined in
June
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.
To conclude
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, there is a decline in
percentage
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the percentage
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 of
prices
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 for all
the
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apply
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three metals
such
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 as zinc, copper and
nickel
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 in the
month
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 of
June
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 and rises back in
prices
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 by October
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Vocabulary: Replace the words nickel, prices, month, june with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "change" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.
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