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Test 1: The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

Test 1: The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The line chart shows a mean monthly change in the cost of copper,
nickel
 and zinc in the year 2014. The x-axis indicates the months and
y-axis
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the y-axis
show examples
 depicts
percentage
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the percentage
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 of changes in
prices
 when compared with
previous
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the previous
show examples
month
.
Interesting
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Interestingly
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, there is a wide range of
shift
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shifts
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 in
prices
 for all
the
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apply
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three metals. Though copper has a 2% change in price in the
month
 of January,
but
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it gradually decreases from May to
June
 by below 1% but there is a sudden peak from
June
 to July reaching
to
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1%.Surprisingly,
percentage
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the percentage
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 for
nickel
 starts at 6%
in
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at
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 the beginning of the year
then
 suddenly drops to -3% in the
month
 of
June
 and
reached
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reaches
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 up to -1%
next
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the next
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month
 by keeping steadily same as
nickel
 till September and steeped again in October. Though the price variation for zinc
had
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was
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 3% in February it declined in
June
.
To conclude
, there is a decline in
percentage
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the percentage
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 of
prices
 for all
the
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three metals
such
 as zinc, copper and
nickel
 in the
month
 of
June
 and rises back in
prices
 by October
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words nickel, prices, month, june with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "change" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.
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