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he following chart shows the results of a British survey taken in 2009 related to Housing preferences of UK people.

he following chart shows the results of a British survey taken in 2009 related to Housing preferences of UK people.
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The following chart illustrates the information about
Housing
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 preferences of UK people
of
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 three different cities
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recorded in 2009.
Overall
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, there was a different rate in Britain’s choices when buying
houses
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.
Whereas
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 the total number of
apartments
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 in all cities was the highest, the opposite was seen in terraced
houses
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 All kinds of accommodation in Liverpool were the minority, except
apartments
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 with 60%, which was the largest figure, 10% more than
apartments
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 in other cities.
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 the percentage of terraced
houses
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 in Liverpool was 10%, just
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 of
London
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, detached
houses
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’s figure was
also
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 10%, 20% less than
Manchester
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. It could be noticed that
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 the number of semi-detached
houses
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 in Liverpool was only one-third of
London
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 and
Manchester
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.
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, the proportion of
Apartments
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 and Terraced
Houses
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 in
London
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 was 30% and 20% respectively, both 10% more than
Maschester
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in Maschester
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, the opposite was seen in the Detached
Houses
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 in
Manchester
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 was 35% and 10% compared with
London
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.
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, there was a similar figure in the percentage of Semi-Detached
Houses
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 in
London
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 and
Manchester
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 at 38%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words houses, apartments, london, manchester with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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