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The map presents us the modify of seaside resort Templeton that happened period between 1990 and 2005.

The map presents us the modify of seaside resort Templeton that happened period between 1990 and 2005.
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The map
depict
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 the constructions of Templeton
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resort
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Resort
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 in 1990 and 2005.
Overall
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, it saw several changes that
occured
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occurred
occur
 in the period of time
such
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 as
factory
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factories
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 and
supermarket
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supermarkets
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 have been added.
To begin
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 with, in 2005 Ferry Harbour
have been
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was
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 constructed on the bottom of the
resort
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as well as
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 a railway
connects
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connecting
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 to the railway station from the west side to the east side of the
resort
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. The building near the station
have
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 been removed and the factory
have
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has been
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 constructed. On the bottom left several buildings
have been
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were
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 developed
to
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into
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 a supermarket in 2005.
However
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, four buildings have
built
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 on the top of the supermarket.
in addition
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. Two
vary
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various
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 apartments and one small apartment have been added on the north of the
resort
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.
However
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,
school
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schools
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 and
hospital
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hospitals
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 have been left developed.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words resort with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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