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The pie chart below shows the different platforms used for international news content by people in the united kingdom in 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features,and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie chart below shows the different platforms used for international news content by people in the united kingdom in 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features,and make comparisons where relevant.
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The
pie
chart
 reveals the percentage of different platforms which are used by the
people
 of
United
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the United
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Kingdom
 for
the
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apply
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international
news
content
 in 2019.
overall
,it is clear from the
pie
chart
 that
people
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the people
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 of
United
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the United
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Kingdom
were
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apply
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used the
news
content
 of international
news
 by television.
similarly
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,the
people
 of
United
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the United
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Kingdom
were
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apply
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used the
news
content
 by Social
media
 and
Internet
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the Internet
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.
Whereas
 the
people
 of
United
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the United
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Kingdom
 were not interested in international
news
 in 2019. From the
pie
chart
,most of the
people
were
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used the television platform for international
news
content
rathen
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rather
 than Social
media
,
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and, Internet
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Internet
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the Internet
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 and
having
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apply
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the majority of 43%.It is
similiar
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similar
between
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to
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 the
people
are
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who are
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 using social
media
 and the
people
are
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who are
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 not interested in international
news
content
 in 2019.The percentage of
the
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apply
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people
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who used
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used
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use
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 Social
media
 and
Internet
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the Internet
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are
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is
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 15% and 14% respectively.
According to
 the
Pie
chart
, the
people
 are far away from using Radio
,Printed
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and printed
newspaper
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newspapers
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 and the
people
 who
were
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apply
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used to be
in
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apply
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oral are less than 10% of the population in
United
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the United
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Kingdom
used
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who used
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 their international
news
content
 in 2019.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 83%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words pie, chart, people, kingdom, news, content, media with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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