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English is becoming the most prominent language in the world. What are the advantages and disadvantages of having only one language in the world?

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Nowadays, there are various types of
languages
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 all around the world and the number of
people
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 who can understand English is increasing day by day. it is argued that we have only
one
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language
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 throughout the world. I think the merits of existing a
language
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outweight
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outweigh
outweighs
 its demerits and
this
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 essay will discuss both in detail. On the
one
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 hand, having a
language
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 has some plus points.
To begin
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 with,
people
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 do not need to learn different
languages
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 and it is challenging for them
becuase
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because
 it is time consuming and hard process.
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 if we just have only a
language
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, we can save large chunks of our time and
our
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energy to do other work.
Moreover
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,
people
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 can easily interact well
togheter
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together
due to
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 the fact that
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languages
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 are no longer
berrier
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barriers
barrier
 to communication and business.
For example
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, Iranian
people
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 can trade different types of products to
other country
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another country
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 without any
problem
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problems
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 related to
languages
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.
As a result
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, it can be certainly said that existing a
language
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 is not only beneficial but
also
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 necessary.
On the other hand
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, there are some grave consequences
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 having a
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.
Firstly
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, many
languages
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 will be destroyed
that
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and
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the
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 significant number of
people
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 have tried to keep them alive and they are the symbols of the culture, traditions and history of a specific country. Another thing to consider is that in every
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languages
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language
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 there are some specific vocabulary that are linked to the customs and rituals of a country and there are not in other
languages
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. It
cuases
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causes
people
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 to face some problems. take
as
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 Arab an example, in their
languages
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 there are a lot of
world
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words
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 about horses that which
one
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 specify a specific type of
horses
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horse
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although
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 there
is
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are
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 just
one
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 or two
worlds
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words
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 in French that describe the horse.
Therefore
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, it is somehow plausible that we have different
languages
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. All things
considerd
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considered
,
although
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 there are some cons ,
such
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 as destroying traditions and cultures, and removing special vocabulary that
help
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helps
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people
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 to communicate well in having a
language
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, it has many pros like more
convenient
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 and
people
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 have better interactions together.
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coherence cohesion
Work on the logical structure of your essay by ensuring your points follow a clear, consistent progression. It's also essential to make better use of cohesive devices and avoid abrupt jumps between ideas.
task achievement
Ensure that you address all parts of the task, providing a balanced discussion of both advantages and disadvantages while presenting a clear position throughout the essay.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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