You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The bar chart shows the participation of children is selected leisure activities in Australia. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

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The graph indicates the level of

participation

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in various leisure

activities

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between Australian

boys

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and

girls

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aged 5 to 14 years old. It shows what percentage of each group

have

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has

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enjoyed these

activities

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, and shows which

activities

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are more popular by gender. In general, the

boys

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this

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age group engage in a higher number of included leisure

activities

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than the

girls

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, with higher

participation

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levels in all

activities

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except

art

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arts

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and

craft

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crafts

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. As we can see, watching TV and videos is the most popular activity for children in

this

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age group with 100% of the

boys

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and

girls

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surveyed having been involved. The least popular activity

overall

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is skateboarding/roller-blading, as it saw the lowest

overall

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participation

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rate amongst the

boys

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and

girls

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, at around 38% and 28% respectively. The

boys

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show a preference for electronic games, which were enjoyed by 80% of them, and outdoor

activities

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such

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as bike riding,

which

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in which

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70% of all

boys

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surveyed had participated

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apply

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. They were less interested in arts and crafts. The

girls

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on the other hand

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took part in bike riding, electronic games, and

art

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arts

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and

craft

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crafts

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at similar rates, with all at around 60%

participation

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Vocabulary: Replace the words participation, activities, boys, girls with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.

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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 3 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
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Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

194 words

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