You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The bar chart shows the participation of children is selected leisure activities in Australia. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

The bar chart shows the participation of children is selected leisure activities in Australia.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words.
The graph indicates the level of
participation
in various leisure
activities
between Australian
boys
and
girls
aged 5 to 14 years old. It shows what percentage of each group
have
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has
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enjoyed these
activities
, and shows which
activities
are more popular by gender. In general, the
boys
in
this
age group engage in a higher number of included leisure
activities
than the
girls
, with higher
participation
levels in all
activities
except
art
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arts
show examples
and
craft
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crafts
show examples
. As we can see, watching TV and videos is the most popular activity for children in
this
age group with 100% of the
boys
and
girls
surveyed having been involved. The least popular activity
overall
is skateboarding/roller-blading, as it saw the lowest
overall
participation
rate amongst the
boys
and
girls
, at around 38% and 28% respectively. The
boys
show a preference for electronic games, which were enjoyed by 80% of them, and outdoor
activities
,
such
as bike riding,
which
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in which
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70% of all
boys
surveyed had participated
in
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apply
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. They were less interested in arts and crafts. The
girls
on the other hand
took part in bike riding, electronic games, and
art
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arts
show examples
and
craft
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crafts
show examples
at similar rates, with all at around 60%
participation
.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall".
Vocabulary: Replace the words participation, activities, boys, girls with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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