The graph shows the number of boys and girls playing sport in an English town in 2012.

The graph shows the number of boys and girls playing sport in an English town in 2012.
The bar chart illustrates how many children, divided in gender, played six various sports
such
as
Tennis
, Badminton, Cycling, Swimming,
Football
and Hockey in a town in England in 2012.
Overall
, it can be seen that more
boys
participated in four sports activities
while
girls
had more participated in two remaining sports. Meanwhile,
Football
held so much appeal among
boys
whilst
girls
were more in favour of swimming. Hockey was at the bottom of both group's
list
Fix the agreement mistake
lists
show examples
. Looking at more detail, in terms of
football
, the
number
of
boys
was approximately three times higher than
girls
with 60
while
girls
number
was 20. With regards to
tennis
, the numbers were closer to each other compared to
football
,
whereas
50
boys
played
tennis
just under 40
girls
played
this
sport. Around 35
boys
did cycling,
however
one-fifth of
this
number
was allocated to
girls
. Regarding hockey, the
number
of
boys
was 15 and the
number
of
girls
was 5 lower than young men.
On the other hand
, the majority of
girls
went swimming.
Whereas
50 young women did
this
sport, 40
boys
did
this
sport. Almost the same trend can be seen in terms of badminton
whereas
40
girls
went
tennis
court in 2012, and 10
number
lower
boys
went to
this
place in a given year.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "whereas, while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words tennis, football, boys, girls, number with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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