Electric vehicles are far less damaging to the environment when compared to gasoline cars. This is why governments all around the world should promote the manufacturing and use of electric cars. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is considered that
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the enviornment
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enviornment
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environment
has been less damaged by
cars
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work
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working
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on
elecericity
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electricity
as compared to
gasoline
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cars
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. I agree that
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production
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the production
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of
the
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electric mobility should be promoted by the authorities all over the world.
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with, electric
cars
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are sustainable
which
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and
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cause less damage to the
enviornment
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environment
,
whereas
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cars
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work
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that work
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on
gasoline
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emitts
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emit
harmful pollutants and increase
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the level
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level
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levels
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of carbon dioxide which directly leads to globalisation and climate crisis.
Moreover
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,
gasoline
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cars
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has
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major
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a major
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role in generating
green house
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greenhouse
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gases which are dangerous for both flora and fauna.
Furthermore
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,
useage
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usage
of electric
cars
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has economic benefits too.
Government
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can escalate
financial
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the financial
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growth of
country
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the country
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by investing in the manufacturing of electric
cars
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as it will create new jobs
of
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in
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manufacturing,
maintance
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maintenance
and charging networks. It is not only beneficial for
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factor
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factors
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but
also
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makes
future
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the future
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secure by reducing
dependance
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dependence
on fossil fuels.
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, the disadvantage of having
elecric
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electric
cars
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demands
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demand
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lot
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a lot
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of care because of
its
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their
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significant charger and battery
requirement
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requirements
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.
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, for a long
route
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route,
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it is
necessery
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necessary
to check the available
on route
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chargers and cable
type
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types
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for charging
as well as
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it takes approximately one hour to fully charge the vehicle which means
lot
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of time to spend on
charging
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the charging
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station.
This
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does not need in
case
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the case
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of
gasoline
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cars
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. one more requirement of electric
car
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cars
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is battery replacement
on
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time to time which
cause
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causes
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extra expenses for a car owner.
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,
although
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elecrtic
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electric
cars
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are
bit
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a bit
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expensive
but
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these have
long lasting
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long-lasting
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good impacts on the
enviornment
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environment
.
Therefore
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,
government
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the government
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should promote
elecrtic
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electric
vehicles as
it
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they
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improves
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improve
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air quality
well
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as well
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as create more security of fuel for future generations.
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