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You have seen a advertisement in an australian magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and after look after their six year old child. Write a eletterto the parents. In your letter Explain why you would like the Job

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing
you
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 about
six-year-old
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a six-year-old
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 child babysitter advertisement in an Australian magazine. I am considering that I am the
best
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most
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 suitable person for
this
 position
due to
 my experiences and abilities. During the mathematics teacher training I received at school, I babysat many children part-time and received serious positive testimonials. During my teacher training, I attended a training specifically on child development under the age of 7 and earned certificates of achievement.
In addition
, since I grew up in a small village with my 6 younger siblings, I always enjoy creating fun games and spending time with people younger than me. I came to Australia 2 years ago to take part in a different education program and worked in a kindergarten. During my 6-month stay, I made many observations about culture and social life. In
this
 context, I must state that I am the most suitable candidate for the job. I think we will have a very fun and enjoyable time with your child if you give us the opportunity. I will be waiting to hear from you. Kind regards, Salih Zeki Köni
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task achievement
Ensure to address all parts of the task. The letter only explains qualifications but doesn't directly express a desire for the specific position or demonstrate understanding of the unique aspects of the job, such as living with the family.
coherence cohesion
Establish a clear logical order of information. Organize the letter into paragraphs, each focusing on a single idea related to the job application. This can create a better flow and showcase an understanding of the job requirements.
task achievement
Maintain a professional tone while also showing enthusiasm for the position. Personal anecdotes are welcome but should be concise and directly related to the skills and attributes required for the role.
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