The chart below shows the amount of lesiure time enjoyed by men and women of different employment status.

The chart below shows the amount of lesiure time enjoyed by men and women of different employment status.
The bar graph illustrates how many
hours
spent
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were spent
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as
leisure
time
by males and females
according to
their
employement
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employment
status between 1998 and 1999.
Overall
, unemployed and retired people spent the most
signicant
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significant
amount of
hours
on
leisure
time
activities. Women who were working as housewives or part-
time
employees had much
leisure
time
compared to males
wlth
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with
same
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the same
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status.
Unemployement
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Unemployment
and retirement exhibited exactly
same
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the same
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amount of
leisure
time
for both genders. Unemployed and retired men spent just over 80
hours
per
week
as spare
time
from 1998 to 1999,
however
, women with
these status
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spend
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just below 80
hours
per
week
during the same period. Male full-
time
employees spent approximately 50
hours
per
week
over the period of 1 year
while
their women counterparts spent nearly 40
hours
per
week
. Housewives spent around 50
hours
of their
time
per
week
and female part-
time
employees'
leisure
time
recorded
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was recorded
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as just over 40
hours
per
week
. There
were
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was
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no
leisure
time
for househusbands or part-
time
employed males recorded in the data.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Vocabulary: Replace the words hours, leisure, time, week with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "amount" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "just over" was used 2 times.
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