The chart below shows the amount of lesiure time enjoyed by men and women of different employment status.
The bar graph illustrates how many
hours
spent
as Add a missing verb
were spent
leisure
time
by males and females according to
their employement
status between 1998 and 1999. Correct your spelling
employment
Overall
, unemployed and retired people spent the most signicant
amount of Correct your spelling
significant
hours
on leisure
time
activities. Women who were working as housewives or part-time
employees had much leisure
time
compared to males wlth
Correct your spelling
with
same
status.
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the same
Unemployement
and retirement exhibited exactly Correct your spelling
Unemployment
same
amount of Correct article usage
the same
leisure
time
for both genders. Unemployed and retired men spent just over 80 hours
per week
as spare time
from 1998 to 1999, however
, women with these status
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this status
these statuses
spend
just below 80 Wrong verb form
spent
hours
per week
during the same period.
Male full-time
employees spent approximately 50 hours
per week
over the period of 1 year while
their women counterparts spent nearly 40 hours
per week
. Housewives spent around 50 hours
of their time
per week
and female part-time
employees' leisure
time
recorded
as just over 40 Add a missing verb
was recorded
hours
per week
. There were
no Change the verb form
was
leisure
time
for househusbands or part-time
employed males recorded in the data.Submitted by historicalpen on
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