The table shows the number of employees and factories producing silk in England and Wales between 1851 and 1901.

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silk

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production,

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number

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the number

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of each gender and

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number

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the number

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of

factories

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, in two countries, England and Wales, over a period of 50

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, starting from 1851

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employees

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decreased over the period,

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part of

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were women in

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silk

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industry.

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the

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of

silk

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manufacturing

factories

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increased over the 50

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, despite some fluctuations. In 1851

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of total

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in

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silk

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the silk

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industry was in his pick 130.750

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76.786 female workers and approximately 54000 male workers,

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number

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of manufacturing

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in 1851 was at its lowest

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in ten

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number

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of

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dramatically increased to 761,

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the total

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experienced a considerable fall of over 20.000 people. Over 40

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decrease and in 1901 was at its lowest approximately 39000, which contained 13375 and 25567 male and female workers respectively.

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the

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of

silk

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factories

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experienced a slow down decline over these 40

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from 761 in 1861 to 623 in 1901